Power: Ruby's Blue's Excerpt

** I haven't been here in a while, so I thought I'd drop a little something on you good folks. This is the intro to a chapter of a novel that I'm working on. It's entitled - Ruby's Blues. It's just a nibble, but I hope you enjoy it just the same. **


Power

I decided at the age of thirteen that I wanted to suck dick.

I was hiding in momma’s closet when one of her men friends came over. That’s what she always called them, but I knew they weren’t nothing more than tricks. My friend Tina, who was thirteen like me, told me so and she knew everything. Her big sister Tammy, who was seventeen, used to tell her everything there is to know about life, then Tina would tell me. We was best girlfriends and all, so what would you expect.

But like I was saying, I was hiding in momma’s closet looking through the skeleton key hole in the door and this big ole man is in the room with her. This man looked big enough to kill a bear with just his hands, but as soon as momma went to sucking on his Johnson, you’da thought that man was a little ole kitten. He was moaning baby this and uuuhhh baby that. You shoulda seen how momma was working him over. She took her time too. I think she put a spell on him or something because I heard him say she had a power over him.

It musta been true, because he was coming to see momma every chance he got, said nobody else made him feel that good. She made that man feel so good he forgot he was in a ho house.

I wanted a man to feel that way about me. Wanted a man to want me more than he wanted anybody else. So, that’s when I made it up in my mind that I was gone get some of that power momma had.

I was gone be the best dick sucker in Mississippi.

Writers Commentary:
In light of a couple of emails I received, I thought I would add these comments.

It's hard to provide an excerpt "in a vacuum" since readers don't have the foresight of where the writer is headed. Nevertheless, this excerpt is designed to give a bit of back story to the character Ruby. Although this excerpt reflects on her as a child, Ruby is an adult in much of the book. However, like most people, her life is painted by her past, much of which had to do with growing up in a whore house headed by her mother and "adopted" grandmother. Albeit alarming, many kids in urban and suburban settings are having sex at an early age. The fact that you nor I raise our kids (or hope to raise our kids) that way doesn't deny that kids are indulging in adult activity at some pretty early ages. I'm not glamorizing it, but I'm not sticking my head in the sand either.

As a writer, I try to maintain a fine balance on delivering the message and providing well written prose. If the writing moves you to emotion, I don't have a problem with that. If the writing, in and of itself is bad, that is when I feel I need to go back to the drawing board.